She stirred the bowl with steel spoon. It was a dessert made of milk, sugar and ghee. Then she offered one spoonful to the baby doll who she had placed next to her.
“Have this dear, its very sweet. You will like it very much.”
“Yes, she liked it”.
Amma replied to her toddler smilingly.
She typed in her mobile with tears streaming from her eyes. She knew this was going to hurt herself more than him. It was not a ‘sorry’, but a please. She then paused. She talked to herself. She deleted his mobile number from phone. As if she doesn’t memorize it. And then sent the draft.
Day 6 – Festival of Words at WriteTribe – 55 Fiction
Edit: Rewrote the first snippet again, since I felt it lacked clarity. Which one is better?
She stirred the dessert bowl with steel spoon as if it contained something. Then she offered one spoonful to the baby doll who she had placed next to her.
“Have this dear, its very sweet. Did you like it?”
“Yes, I liked it”.
Amma replied smilingly to her toddler on behalf of the baby doll.